Redone.

So, I am very unhappy with how my "Thoughts" poem turned out. So, I took the same idea and inspiration and rewrote it. I'm not sure how I feel about this one either. Tell me what your opinion is, please. Is it better? Or worse?

On my mind
these words
these thoughts
So carefully planned.

I want you to hear them
I need you to know.
What I think
And what I feel.

I open my mouth
Ready to speak them to you
When they come out
my words have changed.

I tell you something different
Meaningless
Untrue

As you reply with your equally
Meaningless
response, I can’t help but wonder
why you’ll never know.